I know it's short but a lot of HowTo articles are. I need ideas on ways to expand it and make it funnier. --Some Idiot 08:24, July 7, 2010 (UTC) I will review it my wife wants me to do the luandry any how 03:14, July 13, 2010 (UTC) Some Idiot 08:24, July 7, 2010 (UTC)
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| - I know it's short but a lot of HowTo articles are. I need ideas on ways to expand it and make it funnier. --Some Idiot 08:24, July 7, 2010 (UTC) I will review it my wife wants me to do the luandry any how 03:14, July 13, 2010 (UTC) Some Idiot 08:24, July 7, 2010 (UTC)
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| - I really like the potential of this piece it can be good i know it. Remember i am not attacking it just trying to give ideas to lenthen it a bit. You have a sound idea just run with it.
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| - Was in a major hurry. feel free to express your full ideas. Outlining the actions gives off a feeling of laziness.
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| - the concept is a start but as explained above it was executed too fast. slow it down a bit. I think of it as a play by play type thing. Be careful not to go to stupid but take a step and think to your self what would be funny if it happened next?
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| - *Intro: appreciate a degree of patronizing language. They find it helpful to be talked down to
*Now, For Step 1: To lengthen it you may want to paint a picture as to the difficulties faced by your reader on the way out to the line. the vulgarity here is unneeded you are patronizing the reader. he may have lost a limb on the way past the dog. but assure him it is an acceptable loss. it would be a great build up if the reader goes through 5 kinds of hell to get there only to find they have to return for the basket. assure them they made it once, twice will not be much worse.
*The Beginning: or they have to crawl because of injury sustained getting there. extrapolate on the power line theme like a what if type thing. an example of if it was a power line.
*Removing the Clothes :we call them clothes pins in the states. again give a step by step here. like you are walking them through the process.
*Removing the Clothes : just lose this. use parts of it in the previous step as a second paragraph
*The Returning: I Would have call this Return with the prize. or something. I would finish it with a few tips on how to mess it up enough that the reader will not have to do it again.
*Alternatively...: give a funny way you could black mail him into doing it. congratulate the reader on a job well done
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| - Just think of your reader as a total idiot. They are in trouble and need your advice that is why they are reading it. Have fun with them.
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| - I know it's short but a lot of HowTo articles are. I need ideas on ways to expand it and make it funnier. --Some Idiot 08:24, July 7, 2010 (UTC) I will review it my wife wants me to do the luandry any how 03:14, July 13, 2010 (UTC) Some Idiot 08:24, July 7, 2010 (UTC)
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