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| rdfs:comment | - Waylander37 16:52, January 3, 2012 (UTC) Comic books and Nazis. Of course I'll do this one!
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| Mcomment | - It has some promise, especially if you invest more in the concept.
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| Pcomment | - Spelling and Grammar
*franchise about A red mutant -> franchise about a red mutant
*film and god knows what -> film, and God knows what
*The poularity of the franchise -> The popularity of the franchise
*we didn't beleave it the first -> we didn't believe it the first
*suicide bomber for AlQuada -> suicide bomber for Al-Qaida
*Prince Nuada is an aryan elf -> Prince Nuada is an Aryan elf
*with his reich of robots -> with his Reich of robots
*land of mysticallness -> land of mysticalness
*Hellboy getting chlamydia -> Hellboy getting Chlamydia
*Abe must search the the holy land of israel -> Abe must search the Holy Land of Israel
*watch cartoon Nazi's every saturday morning -> watch cartoon Nazi's every Saturday morning
Format
:There is no real issue with the format as such, however I would be inclined to add more in here in relationship to the fact that this is a franchise, and as such it could have an infobox added that would give it a more Wikipedic feel.
Overall feel/look
:The list of characters is, well, listy, but it has to be by the token of it being a list. I would suggest extending it slightly so that there's a little more content for each character, and a small headshot image for each to accompany it. I'd also put this together as a tables to make it a little prettier to look at. So something like:-
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| Icomment | - Sorry, that Spock picture is a terrible, terrible 'chop. Given that I can't give any more points to images. Source some better images - they don't need to be funny. In fact the best images are those that are unfunny in and of themselves, but are captioned well.
Find good images. Given this is Hollywood film based on a comic, there will be a few floating around via a google image search that would suit you.
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| Hcomment | - Okay - it's somewhat of a habit of mine to refer people back to HTBFANJS, so I will do that now before I go any further.
Okay, now that I've done that, there are a few nice points of humour in here, and a few more bland points. I'm not going to go through the article piece by piece as I feel there is a significant mine that you've missed here in relationship to your concept.
The main thing I would say is that there is a huge amount of random in here that really doesn't add to the article.
For instance Del Toro had just suffered a mental breakdown and was now hooked on steroids. doesn't add any real humour to the article - it just comes across as stupid.
While at the same time Liz Sherman is the love interest of Hellboy, the professor and John Myers, due to the fact that she is the only woman in the main cast. is a good line, as it picks apart the ridiculous in the "reality" of the comic.
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| abstract | - Waylander37 16:52, January 3, 2012 (UTC) Comic books and Nazis. Of course I'll do this one!
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