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rdfs:label | - Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Wind generators
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rdfs:comment | - Lantash (talk) 11:19, March 22, 2012 (UTC) Why not? Haven't done one in ages. Lets do this! 09:36, March 24, 2012 (UTC) You're welcome. --Lantash (talk) 20:16, March 25, 2012 (UTC) I need more time because of things I do IRL... Ughhh... I will get this done I promise! 06:53, April 2, 2012 (UTC) Undone previous review due to lack of substance. Rearranged the sections into a more logical order, added a few more images plus another must-have on any green issue, a fake Al Gore quote. I could go on tweaking things but I reckon it's about time to VFH.
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Mcomment | - Featurable as it is. I'd love to see it as a top ten of the month candidate though.
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Pcomment | - I have no issues here. I think you used plant where it should be plants in one part, but otherwise spelling and grammar are fine.
At one place you use a 2 which does slightly break the line height. Try using the subscript UTF-8 character 2 instead. While what you've done is technically fine, the other is just a touch better, and with my browser it makes a much smaller impact.
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Icomment | - Great images, and the captions work well within the context of the text itself. Something like this image would work well, as would one or two animations of a similar nature.
In short looking for something that looks more technical in the way that it works, and having that cartoonish like technical drawing feel to it.
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Hcomment | - ;READ CONCEPT FIRST, THEN HUMOUR, AND THEN THE REST
I have very little more to add here. The humour is delivered in a brilliant "straight man" voice. I love that approach, but the template at the top slightly belies that as that has a more jocular feel.
I'd be tempted to move that template to the base of the article. The joke within it will be maintained, but you don't show your hand too soon, and you don't start jocularly and then become straight.
While I'd avoid being too jocular, you can afford a few throw away gags in here as well. A one liner in the right place will help keep a person looking for a Monty Pythonesque style of joke in place. Think of the way Colbert works - he is the ultimate straight man but doesn't shy away from the odd joke here and there. That would be the voice that I'd be aiming for.
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abstract | - Lantash (talk) 11:19, March 22, 2012 (UTC) Why not? Haven't done one in ages. Lets do this! 09:36, March 24, 2012 (UTC) You're welcome. --Lantash (talk) 20:16, March 25, 2012 (UTC) I need more time because of things I do IRL... Ughhh... I will get this done I promise! 06:53, April 2, 2012 (UTC) Undone previous review due to lack of substance. Some good ideas there of which I've incorporated most, although my CAD skills don't stretch to complete tech diagrams so a schematic is not really on the cards just now. (Though did think of having a nacelle containing a modified washing machine as the motive power) Rearranged the sections into a more logical order, added a few more images plus another must-have on any green issue, a fake Al Gore quote. I could go on tweaking things but I reckon it's about time to VFH. Thanks for review. Your time and effort is appreciated. --Lantash (talk) 20:12, May 30, 2012 (UTC)
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