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| rdfs:label | - Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Why?:Invade The Falklands
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| rdfs:comment | - I'm tired of staring at this every other day trying to figure out what else I can do to improve this. Someone, please pull a bunny out of your hat and work your magic on a review for it. -- 19:12, July 1, 2011 (UTC) 19:12, July 1, 2011 (UTC) I'll do it. 20:26, July 5, 2011 (UTC) I'll certainly do it in more than one shot, I'll give you a holla on your TP when I'm through. Let's do this! (Smiles maniacally) 20:31, July 5, 2011 (UTC)
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| Mcomment | - Averaged your score using a complex algebra formula.
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| Pcomment | - I corrected some typos, I am not too sure about all of them, so double-check that. I am a French-Canadian you know, so my English grammar is limited. I also changed some minor words that sounded awkward to me, feel free to revert my audacity.
You have in general a very very nice prose throughout the article, I like it a lot.
However, you mention "British" so often that it becomes very tiresome. Try synonyms or "they" instead of "the British". That is what prevented me from giving you an 8.5 here. If you take just one of my suggestions, make it this one. It will improve the article A LOT.
Background
You say "It contains" at the begining. Maybe "It is comprised of" would sound better?
You also say for the second time "name-calling" here, you could replace that with "nomenclature", it would sound good. Also, at the end of the section, "Britain must now decided" sounds awful, I guess you meant something like: "Britain had to take the excruciatingly hard decision..." or such.
Also, I don't know much about these islands, but wouldn't the capital be Stanley instead of Stanely? Reason 1
Why 3 periods at the beginning of the 3rd paragraph? Also, leaving a space after 3 periods is a rule in French, it looks neat, I don't know about that rule in English though.Reason 2
"Sheep" doesn't require an s on plural? I didn't know.
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For the formatting thing, everything is good, but don't forget to put links or somebody will come and rape the place with a {dealink} template.
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| Icomment | - This is the weakest part of the article in my view, though the article is so well-written and funny that it may be overlooked if put on VFH. But that's the key place to improve. I admit it, it is a though topic to find lulzy pics, so it's hard for me to come with suggestions. Weakish one: A funny pic of a sheep with a caption like: This is what we are fighting for, Patriots! Who's with me!?
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#Not funny. It could help somebody that doesn't know at all about the subject, but I am skeptical. Why would they need to know? The caption isn't funny either. If you want to keep this one, a much funnier caption would be needed.
#I thought it sucked at first, but given that this section is so awesome, it worked. I don't know if the pic is one of a politician that could spark more laughs for Brits, but I feel you could EASILY find a better one of a politician that looks enraged If the guy on the pic doesn't add anything for people that would know him, this would be so easy to do better, keeping the same caption.
#The picture in itself supports the text, but it is another case of a Brit inside joke, as I don't know who the hell the guy mentionned is, and that doesn't bring anything funny at all to a great article. I won't lie to you, for an outsider who fail to know who Oliver something is, this is useless. Sorry. It might be useful with a good caption, I just don't understand why your text is so strong and the captions are so weak.
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| Ccomment | - That's a great concept, you hit the mark there, and you are really sticking to it all along, at notime did I sense the article drifting weirdly. It's also easy to understand for someone who wouldn't know anything about the Falklands. Good job! Correct me if I am wrong, but there was a ridiculously costly war over this place, even though the Falkland are indistinguishable on a World map, isn't it? 0.0
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| Fcomment | - I hope that helps, it is a really good article in my view, I really hope pointing out the points I think can be improved will give you a boost to well, improve it. If you have questions or just want to talk about the weather, come to my Talk Page! Also, tell me when you're through with the changes, I may help further and the I'll nom it for VFH if you don't. I would even nom it for VFH right now, even if it has 2 big shortcomings: the damn "British" repetitions and the pics, or at least their captions. I hope it was thorough enough, you're the first one I said I would nom it even if changes were not made. It really is awesome! Cheers!
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| abstract | - I'm tired of staring at this every other day trying to figure out what else I can do to improve this. Someone, please pull a bunny out of your hat and work your magic on a review for it. -- 19:12, July 1, 2011 (UTC) 19:12, July 1, 2011 (UTC) I'll do it. 20:26, July 5, 2011 (UTC) I'll certainly do it in more than one shot, I'll give you a holla on your TP when I'm through. Let's do this! (Smiles maniacally) 20:31, July 5, 2011 (UTC)
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