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| rdfs:label | - Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Port Pirie
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| rdfs:comment | - Shadow-Stalk3r 11:35, 6 December 2008 (UTC)
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| Mcomment | - Mediocre is generous, but I think that if you really put yourself in someone else's position, you could find a way to make this work better for non-residents, and really excellent for those with a more intimate knowledge of the place.
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| Pcomment | - Lots of errors in spelling
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| Icomment | - You have a picture. What is it? Is it funny? No. Lead isn't funny. Fascination with the intricacies of lead could be.
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| Ccomment | - Concept is what the article lacks, and that's why it just ain't funny. I could actually rather enjoy an article written about a town that lives for lead, breathes lead and worships lead. Lead is, by its very nature, dull. An article written from the perspective of a lead enthusiast could be very funny by juxtaposing the mundane with ardent fascination and worship. If you write such a thing well, it doesn't matter that only 6 people have heard of PP, it actually could be funny.
Port Pirie's World of Lead Experience could be a riot if you come up with a deadpan delivery - and if you play it well enough, we'd miss the fact that you are making fun of all your friends.
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| Hcomment | - OK, let's wade in here and look at the humour in the article...
Lede - light on content , and you start off with an open invitation to the place and a suggestion that lead is its main raison d'etre. Not intrinsically funny, but a possible set up .
Creation - I don't know if the date is random, but even if it isn't, it isn't funny. Putting more meat into the story of the town's creation
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| Fcomment | - You've probably put enough work into this to, just about, stave off VFD, but it needs a good central concept to raise it above the "just about" category. 3 words. Concept, concept, concept. From strength comes sweetness.
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| abstract | - Shadow-Stalk3r 11:35, 6 December 2008 (UTC)
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