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| rdfs:comment | - Gangnam style is your mom (talk) 21:30, April 28, 2013 (UTC) DO NOT READ THIS ARTICLE. THIS ARTICLE IS HIGHLY BORING. World War 3 is a new virtual-reality game, where you REALLY go into the real World War 3 in the future and fight and beat the crap out of Russia, China, etc.World War III has nothing much to be talked about. It is just that Stalin, Hitler, Obama, Mitty R Money, and Osama barrel Laden had a snowball fight with Barney, Elmo, Big Bird on Sesame Street and suddenly that weird guy in Inception went into their dreams and killed them all, then Iron Man, Batman, Spider Man, etc, had came and finished that inception guy. Then Hippie Zeus and his bunch came to finish the heroes off, then Poopy " I LUV to jack off " Jackson came to finish the Geek gods off, then the Giants and Gaea wo
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| Pcomment | - The point of Uncyclopedia itself is to be a parody on Wikipedia, normal encyclopedias, etc. So you are supposed to have an article which seems to be encyclopedic with the proper formatting and everything. Words written with CAPITAL LETTERS LOOK LIKE YOU ARE YELLING AT SOMEONE and spoil the impression of the article. The same thing about:
*Swearing
*Parts about "This article is very boring", "I am bored"
*Long lists
*End: "beat the crap out of JB, have sex with Kronos"
#The article is also too short
#However, at the very beginning the article looks very formal as well as at the very end.
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| Icomment | - Well, it is hard to comment because you have no illustrations. If you have problems with putting images in your work, here is a short guide:
#Save an image from the Web to your PC, Apple, etc.
#Follow the instructions on the page Upload File to upload your image to Uncyclopedia
#Put your image in your article using the link : right|thumb|60px|No, this is not me. This is my worst enemy - antoneater.
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| Ccomment | - If you are new to Uncyclopedia, that is what you should do: create your article in the main space - World War 3 or your user space -User:Gangnam style is your mom/World War 3, then create a request in the Pee Review section where it says 'new entry'. And don't put the article content on the Pee Review page: someone who will review it, will find it by clicking the link. That is the way the Review page works.
*Concerning content itself, the concept is funny: to make a computer game out of a World War, but it is not very developed because it:
#doesn't have a lot of jokes
#the idea behind the article doesn't seem developed at all
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| Hcomment | - You have several very nice jokes, it is not bad.
*I especially liked 'Walkthrough' section.
*Parts about 'Russia' and 'China' seem to be racist and are rather pointless. For example, why do you beat the crap out of Russians: isn't it the opposite? In addition to this, everyone expects Russia and China to be in a World War 3 against everyone else, so it not a funny joke anymore but rather a cliché: if you absolutely want to save it, develop more, so it will be funny!
*ALL the long lists that you have are neither interesting to read nor funny
*Random parts about, for example, Inception guy
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| Fcomment | - Good contribution, keep working and don't lose inspiration! Get familiar with the way the site works, in order not to commit errors! The main problems are shortness, randomness and the absence of encylopediness. I have tried to find all the negative points in order to help you improve it and not to make you angry or sad. P.S. You can ask for another review after improving the article.
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| abstract | - Gangnam style is your mom (talk) 21:30, April 28, 2013 (UTC) DO NOT READ THIS ARTICLE. THIS ARTICLE IS HIGHLY BORING. World War 3 is a new virtual-reality game, where you REALLY go into the real World War 3 in the future and fight and beat the crap out of Russia, China, etc.World War III has nothing much to be talked about. It is just that Stalin, Hitler, Obama, Mitty R Money, and Osama barrel Laden had a snowball fight with Barney, Elmo, Big Bird on Sesame Street and suddenly that weird guy in Inception went into their dreams and killed them all, then Iron Man, Batman, Spider Man, etc, had came and finished that inception guy. Then Hippie Zeus and his bunch came to finish the heroes off, then Poopy " I LUV to jack off " Jackson came to finish the Geek gods off, then the Giants and Gaea woke and killed the demigods, then comes the Titans to finish the giants off, then Urinus (a.k.a. The god of pee) came and used pee-in-your-mouth attack and told them to shut up. Then Chaos sealed all of them back into eternal darkness, where they started another snowball fight known as WW4, where you can put rock, poop, penis, boobs, hydrogen bombs, atomic bombs, melons, bombs, etc., into your own snowball, you have one snowball per lifetime, then you die and reincarnate into a different person and get another freaking snowball, and when you hit 100 person with one freaking snowball in three times in a row, in the fourth rebirth you can choose another rebirth or go to the isle of blest.
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