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| rdfs:label | - Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/The Day The Earth Stood Still
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| rdfs:comment | - 06:44, December 20, 2011 (UTC)
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| Mcomment | - Readability can be improved upon. The text messaging abbreviations don't impress me. More research is needed for the original movie.
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| Pcomment | - The conversational style is something which is a part of Uncyclopedia culture, but you have to watch your tone, and focus your humor efforts on the movie. Don't piss off the reader so much.
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| Icomment | - It may become necessary to fix the images after the edits.
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| Hcomment | - Remove all phrases such as "yeah right", "lol", "Ha ha", and so on. Once they are removed, read the remaining text back to yourself. Better, isn't it? Humor must always stand on its own. You also need a better sense of audience. Don't insult them. I know what you're going for, but you repeat it too often. Then there's that phrase "stealing our pizzas", which you are really overworking when you don't really need to. Somewhow, I feel the phrase "All your base are belong to us" has to be worked in here somehow, too.
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| Fcomment | - Go over the entire article from top to bottom, fix the tone, get rid of the "yeah rights" and lol's. Watch the movie or read a synopsis about it on the internet somewhere.
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| abstract | - 06:44, December 20, 2011 (UTC)
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