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| rdfs:label | - Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/DeviantART (2nd nom)
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| rdfs:comment | - EpicAwesomeness and some palewillow guy rewrited it again. FcukmanLOOS3R!!! 10:45, November 27, 2011 (UTC) Somebody???????--FcukmanLOOS3R!!! 04:57, December 5, 2011 (UTC) I'll review it, it may take some time, maybe even a week! But somehow, I think you won't care about that. Man, what have you done again??? lol 14:47, December 9, 2011 (UTC)
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| Pcomment | - I can tell you really made a lot of effort in the prose department and the article is quite good in that regard. I'll try to point out place where it leaves to be desired. I also corrected some minor mistakes. My pleasure, 20$ will be just fine. lol Intro
The first sentence strikes me as just trying too hard and bury everything under a pile of fancy adjectives. You could split the sentence in 2 easily. Remember that the intro is where the reader will decide if he wants to carry on reading or not, so it's got to be clear, not confusing, like this part of the sentence: " rebuilding of a devastating conquered model" LOLWUT?
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That's a lot better in the prose department, quite enjoyable read.Deviant rankings
*"they are usually mindless fantards than artists" - I think you forgot a bunch of words there, not quite sure what you mean.
*"the hopeless citizens to the admins' Superman. - Could be said so much better
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| Ccomment | - Well, the concept is great, explaining the demographics in funny details certainly was a good idea and bound to be funny. Writing an article about a website is always a joke goldmine. I tend to believe however that you are using the false links trick waaaayy too much, as at one point it doesn't even become a surprise, therefore cutting the funniness. For example, "art" is funny, but a lot of them, like "published site data" or charm are not that funny at all.
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| Fcomment | - I hope that helped and that I didn't bitch too much, but what is a Pee Review for? LOL. So overall, I think the biggest improvements could be cleaning up the false links to keep only the funny ones and replacing the boring ones by ordinary links, adding a little more joke per square inch and what I said in the pic section. There are some really good jokes in there so I know that with some "work" you can come up with some more who are just as good! I hope that helped and feel free to get back to me on my talkpage! Bye! Oh, and stop getting banned, silly!
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| abstract | - EpicAwesomeness and some palewillow guy rewrited it again. FcukmanLOOS3R!!! 10:45, November 27, 2011 (UTC) Somebody???????--FcukmanLOOS3R!!! 04:57, December 5, 2011 (UTC) I'll review it, it may take some time, maybe even a week! But somehow, I think you won't care about that. Man, what have you done again??? lol 14:47, December 9, 2011 (UTC)
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