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| rdfs:label | - Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Ford Model T
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| rdfs:comment | - Mangotastic 19:15, 12 July 2008 (UTC)
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| Pcomment | - you have run-on sentences everywhere, your sections are blocks of text, and you have no links. see here for instructions on how to get your article proofread. once you add more content, break it up into logical paragraphs. add links, both direct and indirect . links are the veins that carry uncyclopedia's forest-green zombie blood.
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| Icomment | - you have no images. your opening image should be a picture of the model T , with some witty caption . other images might include an old-timey looking guy with driving goggles and a ford plant. just use google image search and upload 'em in.
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intro: 4
your intro is far too short. you should beef it up by saying why the model t was invented , some background on henry ford, and a list of the ways it affected society. the quotes really weren't funny, if you insist on a quote, make it a single one and try to come up with something wittier.
*history: 6
you tend to be a little random and wandering. try to focus on one thing at a time: the fact that he plagiarised his car, then his possible involvement with german tanks, then other historical fords. extend these ideas by themselves into separate paragraphs. you also tend to focus way more on henry ford than the model t here, concentrate on the history of the car itself .
*name: 6.5
this section is slightly better, although too short. the thin lizzy bit was pretty good. again, expand each thing separately. have other guesses as to the original name, more details with the band, then maybe a quote from mr t.]
*characteristics: 6
you've got some good ideas here. the idea of a ford propaganda machine is really intruiging. things like 'the fastest car of all time' tend to be not funny, since it's obviously not true; try something more like the slowest car of all time' or 'barely able to outpace a human walking at moderate speed'. again, the list of modern car accesories isn't funny, but by making it accurate and then throwing something ridiculous in , you can get a better effect.
*final comments: the 'further information part' needs to be incorporated into the article; either sprinkle it in, make it a regular section, or find some sort of template to put at the beginning of the article . i do like the 'ford propaganda machine' idea, and i think this could be taken further, even giving the whole article that theme .
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| Fcomment | - my preview button tells me that my/your score is 18.4, falling between 'probably VFD' and 'might be VFD/rewrite'. however, you got hurt by having no images and poor prose/formatting. a few minutes taken to add a few pictures and to fix some sentences should let you escape the deletion guillotine. however, if no edits are made for a while, it will likely end up a tasty snack for a hungry admin. fear not! i am confident that you will be able to improve this article to a point where deleting it would be just silly. i recommend expanding on all of your ideas, and going with the tone of the propaganda machine, which is funnier everytime i think of it. if you need any further assistance, i can be found here. good luck.
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| abstract | - Mangotastic 19:15, 12 July 2008 (UTC)
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