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| rdfs:label | - Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/HowTo:Throw a temper tantrum
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| rdfs:comment | - I've had this parent reviewed by several other people who have spawned offspring and have been told that it is on target. Constructive comments always welcome. 00:10, 19 August 2007 (UTC)
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| Mcomment | - I wish I had more to suggest. The only thing I can think of is that you could add more looking forward to the effects on the child's adulthood. On the other hand, maybe you should leave it as is and don't mess with it. As far as I'm concerned, it's ready for VFH and I'm voting FOR.
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| Pcomment | - Properly formatted. Use of lists is effective, especially the repetition such as the shiny red button and what to do with baby brother or sister. Lists are usually hard to do well, because they can be overdone, but you've done it about right. The danger is that humour can wear thin if they're too long, so you might want to go over them once more - for example, you could get rid of either "take a nap" or "go to bed" and I don't think having both getting in and out of the car adds to the humour.
Also you use the "tips" to good effect. One minor picky point, a typo in the second-last paragraph under "thar she blows," first sentence: "a really" is repeated.
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| Icomment | - The pictures you have are pretty good, but I bet you could find more that illustrate something other than babies crying.
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| Ccomment | - You do a really good job of combining the baby's perspective and encyclopedic tone to provide an "objective" explanation of what a tantrum is ." Your article succeeds because of the way you deal with the concept - putting the reader in the child's shoes, explaining what the child experiences but doesn't even understand themselves, and exaggerating it for effect.
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| Hcomment | - Really well done, definitely worth being featured. The opening paragraph builds up well to a great line: "Baby...you've had better moments." Your tongue-in-cheek use of the subject, such as instructions on how to make the tantrum the right level, is good in itself, but then it gets even better as you describe the consequences later in life The part about your "inner child" is perfect.
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| abstract | - I've had this parent reviewed by several other people who have spawned offspring and have been told that it is on target. Constructive comments always welcome. 00:10, 19 August 2007 (UTC)
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